a very vague "i heart art" will do for now
I love the expression on the characters! So great! I kind of wish there was some semblance of the last head before the profile turning so it is not so straight on, if that makes sense.-Victoria
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Wonderful characters. I have to agree that the head turning could be handled a little bit better, the first head and second head seem to be within the same tone as the other two and get lost in the background. Maybe a spacing the second and third head, and playing with the transitions of tone would help this? The girl doesn't seemed too taken aback by the older woman. I'm not sure of the context behind the piece - perhaps she's used to this or trying not to show fear? Other than that, awesomely creepy!
I agree with what is being said so far. The old lady is certainly creepy! And I love how she mimics the form of the crow - repetition is vital for narrative illustrations, as it creates strong connections with you characters. That being said, I do wish the old lady was a little more animated and crossed the divide between her and the little girl. They seem a little "staged", as if set up for a photo. I feel like there could be a little more interaction between them, perhaps with the old lady's arm around the girl pulling her in, while the girl is pushing back, trying to escape. As for your medium, I really admire your mastery of the pen! However, I would be curious to see some of the brush work in your backgrounds brought into the characters as well. I think it would help tie your foreground and backgrounds together, and also give your inking a base to build upon.3/6 studio meeting time: 1:00p
Really wonderful so far! I think what is missing from the main motion of the old woman's head is a 3/4 view really showing that she is turning her head instead of drastically changing to a profile view. I too would also in seeing more interaction between the two characters however I can see how that would be difficult to do sense you want to so motion in one and not in the other. add some damn color.
the characters look great especially the old woman. the way that they are rendered is beautifully done and i think the gray scale works well also. my only other real comment is to maybe make the older womans face stand out a little more in the first few heads because she has a really great and creepy expression and its so faint that it kind of gets lost in the first few heads
Kyle has a point here, color would enhance this piece even more and help with contrasts in subject matter. The issues with the heads is also tough to read and I dont think its anatomy at all..just simply placement and values. Jamies thought of spacing between the second and third head is a good idea, as well as changing the girls expression up a bit. She calls for a greater sense of terror and edginess rather than a whimper. always a job well done with the renderring of ball point pen Joanna.
i actually like all the heads and the movement they make. the old lady terrifies me. and the girls expression is great. i like the mix of water color and the ball point pen. i love the crow! the piece holds together nicely and the over all feeling is creepy i like the high contrast of the black shapes i would like see some of that rich black carries on to the girl. i cant wait to see more. -katie